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you are beautiful
you are all
you are the first
and the last of
your kind

you give and take
but make them both
one in the same

you are known by
many and known
by many names

men and women alike
fear and desire
your touch

you have finesse
and style beyond
comprehension
but never are you
seen

all is left
is what you gave
and what you took

forever will i
be denied you

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He who is unable to live in society, or has no need because he is sufficient for himself, must be either a beast or a god -Aristotle


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The following comments are for "Denied"
by thebeast

hm mm?
I find so many poems with the small i these days, funny, as if there is a movement, or trend or even one mind collective link writer to this small "i" thing.

Doesn't annoy me, I find it odd and telling...since really, rather than show lack of ego, to me using small "i" makes me see the poem from the psychological perspective, in that the writer has low self-esteem, but I did not come here to analyze your poem. I like this poem, very good poem actually, though I doubt that a monster or a god or even Aristotle would ever use a small i in their writings.

Namaste,
Every-body's Karma with ALL love;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: April 12, 2009 )

the i's have it
Yeah, I've noticed that a lot of people are using the lowercase "I", but I've not been one to follow trends and whatnot. HHHHmmmm...as far as from a psychological standpoint I would have to say that one of the reasons I use the lowercase I is to establish the moroseness of the character in each poem since I'm not able to use the type of font that I wish I could use.

But I'm glad you liked this piece. Thanks.



The Beast

( Posted by: thebeast [Member] On: April 14, 2009 )





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