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And the fire burned up through the soles of my feet 
Air curdled and boiled around my skin 
As the swollen sun scorched the sky 
Ragged beasts slouched limply in the parched golden valley 
Bleached bones of the fallen ignored 
Broken fence posts tangled in wire 
Barefoot I roll on up the onstretching road 
Textured like broken diamonds drowned in pitch 
Basted in sweat from the blazing of noon 
Dreaming of icy cold embrace of moon 
Andy T Coombs 


It's all fun and games until somebody loses an eye


The following comments are for "Scorch"
by Lorax

I looked over some of my old entries, and I came to find that you had commented on a few of them. I had commented a while back on Smoking Bugs, which I thought was awesome. But I didn't read your poetry. So here you go.

Liked the poem a lot. Sorry I can't comment very eloquently, but I'm not ordinarily a huge fan of verse. Felt the imagery was good, and carried the whole thing. Atmosphere was good too.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: June 23, 2003 )

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