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Beauty in my dream

Who is this that looks like a new dawn
Fair like a moon, bright like a sun...
She ravished my heart with the glance
Of her eyes.
'Ravished my soul with the catwalk
Of her legs.
'Dying to meet this light-skinned beauty
Whom my soul cherishes beyond restraint.

Her hair is as black as a raven.
Her eyes glitter like cat eyes.
Her cheeks are comely with beauty.
There is no flaw or stain to be found
In her beauty, very perfect in all modesty.

I sought her whom my soul cherishes
But found her not
Because it was a dream.
Until the day breathes
And the shadow flee,
She is like a irrestitible treasure
I love to cross her path...

------
Dgreat


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by Dgreat

@DGreat
My friend, this was beautiful. The is no longing worse than that of the heart's; it makes us ache and hurt in ways the body can't fathom. And all that came through with this short piece.

Wonderful work! I hope to read more.

And, I hope the woman of whom you write ceases to be but a dream!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: April 6, 2009 )

Beauty
Sweet and sad feelings. This, for me, is the best poem I have read of your work. You connect with that longing and the reader gets it. One from the heart and well written as well.
Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: April 7, 2009 )

hi ochanilele and jonpenny
Thanks for your comment. I would have replied, but owing to the sickness that caged my body and soul. I am back!

( Posted by: Dgreat [Member] On: May 13, 2009 )





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