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Light barely enters
Yet, it inflames in me the desire
The wish to discover the entire
World. I always hesitate

Voices behind my window
Screams and shouts of despair
Knocking hands...stains of blood
Suffering eyes...each tries to flood

When the sun can still on me shine
When I wake up in the morning and everything is fine
When the world is STILL mine

I will not open my window
I will keep my window shut
Till I see the rainbow
Till I forget how to cry
Till I hear smiles multiply
Then I'll try

To err is human, To forgive is divine

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The following comments are for "Locked Window"
by Obsession

@ Obsession
This is your second piece on litdotorg. Again, I'm very happy to see you here.

I feel weird when I comment on poetry, because I'm not a poet. I'm a writer -- nonfiction and now short stories -- and my own attempts at poetry are elementary and juvenile. I am very jealous of the gift poets share!

I really don't have any other comments on this piece other than it's a wonderful attempt to convey despair and loneliness.

I think most of us have those days where the weight of the world is too heavy on our shoulders; hell, some days the weight of the sheets is too heavy on my body, and I can't bear to drag myself out of bed! And we wait for something to move us, to touch our souls, and put our bodies and mind in motion again.

What was your motivation for writing this? From where did the inspiration come?


( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: April 5, 2009 )

Actually, Uhmm it has some hope in it! It is about those who think everything is against them, though life is full of people who suffer from real problems, it seems people forgot that they are blessed just to be alive ... That inspired me.

I also implied that this world is beginning to follow this way in their living, so I said that I will live a lonely life if so, I don't want to be the same as them.

That is it!

( Posted by: Obsession [Member] On: April 6, 2009 )

@ Obsession
Good stuff! I like seeing inside a writer's mind. Often, one learns more about a piece when one understands why the author wrote the piece.


( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: April 6, 2009 )

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