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I have an alien self
One of its kind

I can't ignore it or forget it on my shelf
It is called the aching heart

It bleeds each time I play with it
It has a big wound

No matter how much I try to stop it
It seems that I'm doomed

On my knees, I say "please
Stop crying, your wound is drying"

Every time I hear the same answer
"you know me, I was a good dancer

Words used to cure my pain
Now dictionaries are used in vain"

My reaction is always the same
My head is down, it is so lame

And I turn around and see my dusty shelf
And I think "maybe it is the time to ignore my alien self"

To err is human, To forgive is divine

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The following comments are for "My alien self"
by Obsession

@ Obsession
First: You seem to be a new member, and I'd like to welcome you to the pages of litdotorg. Make sure to PM me your email address, and I'll add you to the mailing list for the monthly newsletter.

The poem you published here runs rather quickly in spite of its length; as soon as I began reading, I was done, and I'm thinking you meant for it to be read quickly.

I love your comparison of the human heart (yours) to an alien self. I think at some time all people feel their emotions are alien; we don't understand why we feel what we feel, but we feel those alien emotions nonetheless. It is part of what makes us human.

Good work!

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: April 4, 2009 )

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