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Trust me 
Not yourself 
For I bring good fortune, 
I bring you wealth. 
 
Love me 
Not yourself 
For I bring you wisdom 
I bring you health. 
 
Kill me 
Not yourself 
For I bring you weapons 
I bring you stealth.


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The following comments are for "Allied Enemies"
by False Dawn

who is me?
Great poem, I like the progression from trust, to love, to death but I have to ask. Is the me you, or is it someone talking to you, if so who is it?

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: April 21, 2003 )

Me
Me is no-one in particular. Well, I suppose it may have been at one time, but I forget precise details. The "me" in the poem is someone selfish, with an air of Iago from Othello about him. It's that type of generic character that it is based on, though there is a more radically political view to this poem too.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: April 21, 2003 )

interesting
Interesting. Slightly formulaic, but definitely interesting.

I'm glad you already replied to the question about 'me' though, because I was also left wondering.

Score 7/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: April 21, 2003 )

8/10
I love the sense of seduction in the rhythym of this poem but I think most people will miss the political message and wonder instead why the third stanza seems out of synch with the rest.
Good stuff.

( Posted by: desconocida [Member] On: April 9, 2004 )

Very Political
This struck me as very political, and I identify it with every country that wages war on another. It seems this is the repeated theme we here from all of them. Great one.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: August 11, 2004 )





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