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Devouring that fifth lap
suddenly raced in a thought
My shoulders were so heavy
with some unbearable load

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I strived to just go on
I felt you were watching
I knew it won't be long
before I failed in matching

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.
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Despite your angry look
In the middle of the race I flopped
The crowd, did they fall silent
Or maybe the hearing stopped

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I watched ... as the runners passed me by
slowing down ... to near standstill





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The following comments are for "in the middle of the race"
by waelnawara

@waelnawara
I'm curious -- what inspired this poem? Did you run track when you were younger?

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: April 1, 2009 )

The Race
Hello Ochani !

No. I never ran in that kind of race.

But we all run in the eternal daily grind race, don't we?

:)

( Posted by: waelnawara [Member] On: April 10, 2009 )





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