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your glass doll bleeds your name in your
empty rooms on the panes she has
scratched your name she sits in the
window laughing at the moon.

rocking chair rocking chair do you hear
footsteps on the empty stair do you
rock back and forth to the screams
of a dead childs unanswered prayer

your glass doll planted glass flowers
your fragrance invades her glass dreams
in the dolls head we can see your last hours
glass friends scream your final screams

the glass doll rocks in the chair
searching for a final prayer.
the glass doll rocks in the chair
searching for a final prayer.

your glass doll sleeps on your grave
glass friends lay glass wreaths
they smash with the real grief
from the frenzied winds that rave.

whoever you are come forth these are the days that must happen to you.

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The following comments are for "doll"
by icemoon

Wow! Great song. Good songsmithing here. The terrific rhyme bounce in the first verse won me over in the first read. The chorus is creepy and sad Nice! - 'Dead child' kinda hit me hard but it's to the point and smacke the listener. The fragility evoked in the use of the word 'Glass= in really nice too. Ok Ok I'm gushing but it's a rare treat to see this quality.
Good job!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 21, 2009 )

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