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Hands reach up and pray
To the valley of the sun
Where gold, copper and steel
Are cast and forged into one
Making wheels to ride
The chariot of the Gods



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The following comments are for "Making Wheels For the Gods"
by FireFly747

Nice
Enjoyed this one, FireFly747. Though many mythologies have the Gods riding chariots, the Maya, in particular, come to mind after I read your poem.

Grammar comment: 3rd line- I think you meant to say "copper" instead of "cooper".
4th line- I believe "forged" is grammatically correct where "forge" is not.

Well done!

( Posted by: Eldros [Member] On: March 23, 2009 )

The Valley of Kings
Funny enough, Egypt invaded for the first time by the Hyksos around 1650 BC because they had invented chariots.

Nice piece. Thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: waelnawara [Member] On: March 26, 2009 )





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