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I walked to the mirror and wondered at the single reflection
Or the space of a heartbeat or the road lost in any direction
Is there meaning in the worry - are we holding lifeís benediction
Or a ceremony lost without true faith or conviction

Few choices are made in the unnatural selection
While holding ourselves blameless for life' s moral infections
Bouncing blindly only seeking temporary affections
Seeking truth but relishing the complex deceptions

Youíre alone and you think your singings all done
Youíve nothing to atone Ė whatever is done, is done
Caught in the whimsy of lifeís ole fickle fate
Communicate with your simple song

I walked to the mirror and wondered at the single reflection
Or the space of a heartbeat or the road lost in any direction
Is there meaning in the worry - are we holding lifeís benediction?
Or a ceremony lost without true faith or conviction

Iím lost in a world wrought with nightmare dreams
Ethical giants falling for the silliest schemes
For all I know this really is as it seems
I just canít see what it means



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Why is doing what you love the hardest thing to do? Is it because failing what you thought defined you would be too devastating a thing from which to recover? If so, we stay where mere accident has left us.


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The following comments are for "Simple song"
by jonpenny

Ken's road of life.
Life certainly is a puzzle Ken...This poem
reminds me of two songs..."Is that all there is" and "Stop the world, I want to get off!"

It's easy to get lost in the mire of life...but if you have faith...you will find the right signpost.

Great job!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 17, 2009 )

@Bea
If life was not what would 'off kilter' folks like us write about.
Thanks so much.
Bless you!
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 17, 2009 )

@jonpenny
Wow, I was pretty surprised by this one...with a title like "Simple Song" I naively expected a simple song =) This is much too cleverly wordsmithed for me to consider simple! I really liked the intricate rhyming and the mood - a nice mix of confusion, contemplation and curiosity.

To me, the title and 4th line of the 3rd stanza just don't seem to fit with the rest. What was your intent when you chose the title? I'd like to understand your perspective. Is it meant to express irony? I sometimes fail to pick up on that, and sarcasm.

Suggestion: for the 1st line of the last stanza, consider using "nightmarish" rather than "nightmare". "Nightmare dreams" seems a bit redundant to me.

Thanks for sharing your work!

( Posted by: Eldros [Member] On: March 18, 2009 )

Simple song
Thanks so much for your comment.

I had written before that I hate it when songwriters pose and spout esoteric drivel about what the song meant. Most of the time, for me, there is a great distance between what inspires a song - what the muse gives me - and what ends up being recorded.
This one, meant to be sarcastic, came from a conversation with my lead guitar brother about the 8 second rule in visual ads - it has long shown up in action movies. Note how many camera cuts there are - if you count out scene length it will astound you. Something about our (or my) limited attention span - and the goings on in the world.;)
My brother created a simple repetitive riff and we drove it to distraction. I liked the idea of a complex lyric laying over simple rock instrumentation.
The other ironic element, particuarily in the (Bridge) third stanza - is the snarky take on some rock group's pretentious offerings.

The 'nightmare' was 'nightmarish' but when I began to sing it I got lazy mouthed and - well that happens in rock music.
We recorded the song as a lark, although I liked the lyric, I liked the riff, and it's fun to play - maybe having a laugh at ourselves when we play it.
See.. no great revelation huh? Sorry. :(
Thanks my friend for your comment.
Ken

Go to - www.isound.com/burning_sage_band -to hear the song.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 19, 2009 )





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