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Here they are these
birds whose chirping silence
hides,

these ghostly crowds
which churn,inside my only
true perceiving eye.


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by gamblerman

@Gambler
Truely I'm superstitous and do not like birds, however I really dig your poem. It spoke, although short, in a haunting and jarringly perceptive style and made metaphoric sense beautifully. It creeped me out but in a great way! Superb work. Namaste, Gale.

( Posted by: Gale [Member] On: February 27, 2009 )

It's all good....
Birds and creepiness and inner perception...

( Posted by: gamblerman [Member] On: February 27, 2009 )

Birds
Great poem. Nice creepy vibe. I read this several times at different times - each time my mind's CPU sent the poem to different memory stacks. That is some good writing that is!
Thanks
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 27, 2009 )

well....
that is a true compliment....good poetry is ambiguous...you can see and feel multiple things at every new read....

( Posted by: gamblerman [Member] On: February 27, 2009 )





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