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***i wrote this a long time and have only edited once. it's hard to remember the exact emotions i felt at the time, but i would like to work on this piece more because i really like it. any comments/suggestions would be helpful. thanks x's10.***

rose petals sinking into
all parts of me.
suffocating,
inside my lungs
everytime i think
after every encounter with you
rose petals
lifting my body, my organs,
my veins, and every cell of me.
and lasting for days
afterwards. i am high.

walking side by side
another person, another thing.
the smell of skin and body and blood
thick in my memory as
magnificent as rose petals.

your lips are like
rose petals in a photograph
something i will never touch
made glossy and finished by memory.

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someday could be today...





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