Help me to Breathe
by Padme (Member) - published: February 18, 2009
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Category - Poetry
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You’re car is gone

Breathe

He went away

Breathe

He may not be the one for me

Breathe

But I worry that he is

And he is gone

Breathe

An invisible arrow strikes my chest

He is no where to be seen

I begin to panic

I look desperately for him

And another arrow strikes my heart

From my own bow and hand

Breathe

I must let go

Breathe

Let go and

Breathe

Just keep breathing

In and out

A big deep breath in

Slower exhale out

Inhale for six

Exhale for eight

Eight and

Ten

Ten and

Twelve

Keep on counting

And forget

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The following comments are for "Help me to Breathe"
by Padme

inhale - exhale - breathe...
Looks, like you got it all fixed, the breath vs breathe, great;-)

Breath, awareness of breath by the meditator, is one of the most primary basics of beginning meditation and meditators. Of course, psychologists and other health professionals also suggest various exercises regarding this same concept in order to relieve stress.

I also see this, from my perspective as a Tibetan Buddhist about "letting go", attachments are a source of suffering and stress, and throughout my life I have had to let go of many material things, once I did, I found that they were just things, things can be replaces, and they always were, I have been lucky in that department. Now when it comes to people, you cannot replace people, relationships, but at some point you must "let go", that allows the karma or right person (if one is meant to be) to come to you or you to them, clinging to what is not meant to be, what is not right, what is causing you suffering only leads to more of same, but I am sure you are quite aware of that due to the nature of this most thought filled post.

Good piece of work here...I enjoyed this one very much, right up my alley, particularly these days;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: February 18, 2009 )

Breath
I loved this. I read it several times and took the word 'breath' as a command and loved the cadence. One question:Did you mean for the word to be 'breath' or 'breathe'. I kinda like the verb better than the noun - but either way - good job. ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 18, 2009 )

Beautiful
The hardest times to practice (mindfulness of our breath) are when we need it the most. Sometimes when things are really, really tough all one can do is keep breathing.

Your poem conveys all of this quite beautifully, as well as the sense of tension, the powerful emotion and the flurry of thoughts that call for the breath in the first place.

My read on it, anyway...

Most enjoyable! Thank you!

( Posted by: Eldros [Member] On: February 25, 2009 )

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