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Life is complicated.
People come in-and-out of our life in a blink of a second.
There are those who believe they are in control of their path,
but in reality some one else dictates their every second.
Wake up.
Stand up.
Jump up.
Choose your own path.
Let the drums play.
Hear their music!

SunshineAngel




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The following comments are for "Path"
by sunshineangel

Path
Some of this poems carries the right message. I might suggest taking and editing lines 2,3 and 4 so they are shorter and snappier. Give it a try.
Good luck.

( Posted by: Cleveland W. Gibson [Member] On: January 17, 2009 )

Path
SunshineAngel,
Another fine piece of poetry and I like the length of all the lines. No problems here. Keep writing more more from ou wonderful pen.

Artorius

( Posted by: Artorius [Member] On: January 21, 2009 )





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