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you are worthless

you live your life
without a care
you say anything
will do anything
to win friends
the mask they see
is a contradiction
of who you really are

your parasitic lifestyle
will only last for so
before reality makes
an appearance
and the paper
world in which you have
created and lived in for
years on end
will crash around you
and burn

your demise is inevitable

do my world a favour
cease to exist

He who is unable to live in society, or has no need because he is sufficient for himself, must be either a beast or a god -Aristotle

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The following comments are for "You"
by thebeast

fresh eyes
In the line: "you life your life" I think you meant to say "you live your life", instead. Since it's near the beginning, it sorts of trips up the reader.

I like how you detail their behavior, but not their actual personage, because it allows us to picture someone from our own lives who behaves this way.

( Posted by: Mandolin [Member] On: December 30, 2008 )

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