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If only you know the effect you have on me
Your mere glance is more than enough to last for a day
I hope you do not notice
I hope you do not see
Because I can't let you know
You are the weakness in me

I wish I could be with you
Every night to watch you fall asleep
And kiss you goodnight
So if I die tonight I know what I will do
I will spend eternity watching over you

You are perfect in my eyes
Sometimes so good to be true
I could not believe my eyes
The first time I looked at you
You are perfect in my eyes
What I'm saying is true
I'm longing for the day
I will be perfect for you

Sometimes it is so hard to find the words to tell you
How much you mean to me
A lot of times I don not say anything at all
But I hope someday you will understand
Loving you is what I live for

There is a love that only you can give,
A smile only your lips can show,
A twinkle that can be seen in your eyes
And a life of person only you can complete,
The way you did with me.

You who loved me and also cared
Me who acts like you are not there
You who caught me when I fall
Me who ignores your effort at all
You who cared and was willing to wait
Me who loves you but not it is too late.


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The following comments are for "You Affect Me"
by LainCoubert

Sweet...
"I wish I could be with you
Every night to watch you fall asleep
And kiss you goodnight
So if I die tonight I know what I will do
I will spend eternity watching over you"

this toughed at my heart strings!
what a sweet sentiment and testament of love.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: December 31, 2008 )

@ LainCoubert
This was beautiful!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: January 3, 2009 )

Wow!
It touch me!!!

( Posted by: sunshineangel [Member] On: June 11, 2009 )

affecting me
Terrific poem. This is another one of those pieces that has the makingsof a fabulous song. In the third stanza this hit me as a catchy refrain - a great hook.

-(1)You are perfect in my eyes
(3)I can not believe my eyes
(5)You are perfect in my eyes
8)I will be perfect for you -

Great poem - why not give it a go and see what song lyrics could come of this.
Here's the thing , for me, it's allready a great song, if you sing the third stanza as a refrain. But maybe I'm being obtuse and that is exactly what you intended. Anyway - I did get excited when I read this - so forgive my exhuberance.I am a poet but songwriting is my passion.
Thanks Great job.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 11, 2009 )





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