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spurting corroded arteries
blocked up putrid nastiness
Greasy, fetid, stench
Gagging back bile
I saw whats in your arteries

(I'm a McDonalds worker)

Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?

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The following comments are for "Aertery"
by thesadpoet

Wow bummer!
This is awful - the subject not the poem - I would like this more if my occasional need for a macburger wasn't so pressing. Most of the time it's Mister Natural for me - sprouts - hummus - green vegis - whole grains - fruit. I just think my immune system may turn into a weakling if I don't give it a jolt once and a while. Whenever I feel too healthy I quickly run to the nearest fast food emporium and indulge - knowing, with a glow in my greae filled and satisfied center, that I have fortified and exercised my immune system for the onslaught of the modern world. My sense is that you were being serious of the perils - sorry for my dark mind - this one made me laugh out loud. Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 29, 2008 )

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