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A great house was to be built near the home of their master,
a wealthy Maryland land baron.
As he possessed scores of horses and mules,
along with dozens of negroes,
he'd be handsomely paid in pounds and shillings,
in return for their labor.

n. Joe
n. Zeke
n. Big Bill
n. Willie
n. Ray-
would unload wagons and carts, dig, hammer, lift and tote.

During July's heat, his horses were watered well.
His negroes were extra-rationed, too.
When November's rain turned to sleet,
blankets were brought to cover his horses.
His negroes were allowed to warm their frosted hands,
with fires made from discarded wood.
Following long cold days of labor,
they were fed bowls of broth, with ham hock bits
and pieces of crusty bread.

Little Moses wiped Spring's mud and filth from his master's boots,
before being sent to fetch young Lily.
Pretending to be a great black cat,
like in stories told by ole Miss Winnie,
he ran to Colored Creek.
There, Lily waited, fresh bathed, wearing clean hemp.
It was Tuesday, which meant a visit one mile away.

As her master touched her, she leaned forward.
Closing her eyes, she gathered her favorite flowers-
trumpets, blue bells, little hats, fragrant blossoms
and twigs of lace.
When he finished, she let them go,
reopening her eyes.

Before returning home to his gravid-with-child wife,
their master produced an apple from his jacket.
Handing it to Little Moses,
he instructed him to go straight back to Colored Creek with Lily.

While they walked, Little Moses shared his apple with Lily.
They could hear echoes of
n. Tom
n. Carl
n. Jesse
n. Wally
n. Nate-
lugging, pounding, pushing and pulling.

Taking his hand, Lily began to softly sing in distant tongues.
This day Little Moses felt happy, strong

..and freedom's house was built.



12.11-13.08

------
below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "Freedom's House"
by Bobby7L

poewhit
Captures a odor of the life on those plantations. *USED TILL DEFUNCT*

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: December 15, 2008 )

poewhit/rcallaci..Of building ..
..the White House

poewhit-
Thanks for input.
Robert William

Bob-
Though surface level references the building of the White House, there is also a metaphorical tale within..

**- "n." was placed in front of names to denote their being negro. This can be found in historical archives, if not in history books. Of course, the "master" was paid in "pounds and shillings", by the U.S. Government, for the services/laboring of their "horses, mules and negroes." Hopefully, mind's eye of reader will come into play in space to right of those lists...

I don't rate pieces, but do note your extravagant number.

Tante grazie,
Robert William

TinaLouise-
Your extravagant clue to visit is noted. Grazie.

Ciao,
Robert William


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 17, 2008 )

Bobby... "clean hemp"
Bobby,

A beautiful metaphorical tale, on which I have commented elsewhere. I returned here to reevaluate my previous response. I said that the flowers Lily gathers symbolize procreation because I assumed that "her master" is indeed Little Moses - master as in her husband-to-be (transliteration welcome, I trust). Then, I realized (too late, perhaps) that it's their shared master who touches her. In that case, could the flowers represent rape - as in deflowering? I suppose the description of Lily waiting in her clean hemp prepared me for her encounter with Little Moses, not their master. At any rate, I truly love this piece.

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: December 17, 2008 )

Ariana's transliteration
Ariana-
Your take is an interesting one.

While being "touched" (raped), Lily goes somewhere..an escape from reality of situation. She pretends to be picking beautiful, fragrant flowers.

"Little Moses", pretends he is a "great black cat" (Black Panther)..

Thank you for returning to this piece. I truly appreciate it.

Ciao,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 18, 2008 )





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