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That girl was super smart...
Like a compruter she was...
By gods that girl had a brain full o' brains...

Brains are a 50/50 thing at best...
Sometimes they help you find your keys
and sometimes they convince you that
your landlady is stealing your bone marrow
through the floorboards...

That girl was supersmart...
Like a compruter she was...
By gods that girl had a brain full o' brains...



------
Terence Patrick Burns


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The following comments are for "BRAIN FULL O' BRAINS..."
by kilgoretrout

Behind the Counter
Terence,

I liked this a lot.

My eyes reached ahead of my reading the words of the first line and saw the phrase "super smart" (which, by the way, is written as one word in the last stanza. On purpose?) as the idea of a supermart, or supermarket. Then, as I read the line fully, the girl was very smart and working at a checkout counter in a store. You are walking away with your purchase, amazed at her knowledge.

And you have to go home to that problem with your landlady.

Maybe the checkout girl could help you with that.

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: December 2, 2008 )

response to 'BFOB'
Terence,

Trout meets literature full-tilt.

More succinct than earlier efforts which seemed
somehow, broken-up, or somehow broken down. As if Terence were pollinating public-like thoughts for future inclusion, or future poet like inspection.
Commendable for my reading pleasure. I welcome
in the literary form of a 3-5 lined Stanza
(3-5-3). On the up then?...

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: December 2, 2008 )





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