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I got accepted to the Peace Corps...
I didnt go to Africa...
I went to San Francisco to get drunk instead...

I had a black domanatrix love me to the wall...
I chose a half Japanese lover instead...

I was offered a percentage in the Hostel...
I chose to crawl back to NY on my belly instead...

I had a chance to hug Amma again...
I went to the movies instead...

I was gonna join the army after 9/11...
I became a terrorist sympathizer instead...

I was gonna be a fireman...
I got MS instead...

I swore id never write or drink again...
I took it back instead...instead...instead...

------
Terence Patrick Burns


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by kilgoretrout

Of actions and distractions
Terence-
Transcending this mundane material madness is no day at the zoo.

Keep putting pen to paper.

Ciao,
RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 29, 2008 )

instead
Regret and obdurate circumstance is the bane and grist of a poet. Simply and soundly done. I get a kick out of your work - s snidley hold of the tongue in cheek is the way you like to write is it? It makes me smile. Thanks my friend.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 29, 2008 )

Life IS Beautiful...and there is always tomorrow!
Bet your bottom dollar there will be sun TOMORROW! TOMORROW! TOMORROW... you only a day away!

You can hug Amma tomorrow! Life is beautiful, no matter how ugly "it seems" sometimes...life is beautiful. Each day a new day, a new way...one day at a time...baby steps as Bill Murray character's said once in the old comedy movie called: "ALL ABOUT BOB";-)

Namaste!

Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 30, 2008 )

Kilgoretrout... instead
Kilgoretrout,

Let me begin by saying that I love your work. It's snappy, biting, full of contrasts, untentative. I dug this poem. It's a slap in the face to those suffering from delusions of grandiosity; it's a submissive gesture to one's self.

It contains a crude eloquence: harsh but elegant.

Thank you for it!

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: December 1, 2008 )





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