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Shes done it with her tears...

The night was warm and close...

Like apples and peaches it
was sweet and healthy...

Its been a long time since I had healthy...

I taste the salt accompanied by
so many airport goodbyes...

Now you have an excuse to come to New York...

I say things as she cries...

Time better spent kissing and holding
this very dear human being...

I love her because she loves me this much...

and why not...why not...

------
Terence Patrick Burns


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The following comments are for "THE NIGHT WAS..."
by kilgoretrout

Kilgortrout... of loving.
Kilgoretrout,

This poem hurts. Elegantly-diluted, much like tears dripping. It contains a sardonic humor, which underlines the acquiescence.

The imagery was appropriately seasoned:

I taste the salt accompanied by
so many airport goodbyes...

^ A great intermingling of the carnal and the spiritual.

Thank you for this.

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

Killer final lines
A sentiment I've tried to put into poems and failed, wordily, in the past. You do it very well, giving a simple, direct poem a whole other level of subtlety. Yes: why not love her simply because she loves you so very much? (Why is it, indeed, that that sometimes feel like an invalid, or less-than-perfect rationale for love? It's a complex thing, the debt one can demand of another, willing or otherwise, by professing love...) And yet why not... why not?

( Posted by: mobiussoul [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

THE NIGHT WAS
~ Two Trouts Swam
Now, three ~~~

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 27, 2008 )





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