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Praises fell from out my lips
Across your throat, your heart, your ribs
Sliding smooth from off my tongue
Pooling warm between your hips

Close your eyes and breathe “Amen”
I will be your seraphim
You’ll rise up a phoenix, baby
Heaving from my depths within

A palpable euphoria
My flesh sings with your Gloria
When sex becomes communion
We collapse as one
A Peita


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The following comments are for "Communion"
by DameSansMerci

Amen
Oh if could always be like this. Nice work. Very precise and focused. Journeyman skill- for me perfect execution. Thank you!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 25, 2008 )

What a coincidence?
Hi,

You know just two or three days ago I posted an old copyright poem I wrote back in 2003 (have kept it on another site in storage) that has to do with sex and the communion of it I titled it communion...and I posted it here about two or three days ago, had it up for a bit then decided to pull it off and post later, like in a couple of days, then shucks you write this the next day or so about sex and communion, what a coincidence, see how the collective creative unconscious works? I mean what are the odds...I like it. Very nice job.

I am posting my COMMUNION tonight. Thanks for posting yours, very enjoyable nicely written, I see JonPenny is a fan, how wonderful and Penelope too...hey, remember Wanda? Yeah, I do. Poor thing. Maybe you weren't around during her sad days, a sad and long story to tell...but one day I might tell you, all I hope she is getting the help she needs, she loved to plagiarized or copy ideas of others, didn't have an original thought in her/his head whatever, it is done, she is gone for good, atleast as Wanda that is...funny too, how she appeared )the Wanda that is) the day after I posted a poem called Wanda...hm mm? That was really wierd! I know you are not Wanda, so please do not take offense, just the memory popped into my head because of the coincidence.

You see you poem is actually good...unlike Wanda's, oh, I forgot she had not work, she just stole from others. Got kicked off this site as Wanda, from you never know where Wanda might be...maybe she likes to play hide and seek? Who knows what floats folks boats these days, sad is all I have to say.

So many odd almost supernatural things happen around here now and then, if I weren't who I am, it would be enough to drive me mad...but I am who I am and I know what I know...and I know that I LOVE YOUR POEM, yes I do.

Keep them coming DAMSANSMERCI...oooh, sounds so Dominatrix? Kidding, I am a kidder. I have read your other works if you look back on the comments, good to see you INPSIRED to post again...

Namaste,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 25, 2008 )

Lena,
I've taken a good hiatus from Lit.org in the last few months (work stifling the font of inspiration and all) so I hadn't seen your "Communion." I'm sorry my timing was so awkward! I do really look forward to reading your take on the subject (great minds and all)- I'll be keeping an eye out!

Thanks for the kind words on my poem, and again, I'm really sorry if the timing of my post upset you at all. Thank you for reading my works in any case; it means a lot. =) Always a joy to hear from you!

( Posted by: DameSansMerci [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

COMMUNION
How did you read upset from any of what I said? NO, just making a point about collective unconsciousness, amazing the creative process with all tap into, inventor too, seems to happen to them quite a lot, all come up with same ideas at same time, only in my communion I wrote mine years ago...cool you connected to the concept and the creative connection, cool that you write your OWN works and not that of others like poor old WANDA, it just all made me think of her, because I like your poem. Great to have you back at Lit.Org DameSANSMerci...love that name, again, very dominatrix of you, hahahahah;-) By the way, what is that thing? Your avatar? Looks like a sand castle part? Very odd? Oh, I see it now, it must be a gargoyle? NO?

Namaste,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

Gargoyle!
Ha, it is indeed a gargoyle! Well spotted! Glad again that you liked the poem, and thanks for the quick reply.

( Posted by: DameSansMerci [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

DSM... seraphim.
D.S.M.,

I'm unfamiliar with your work and glad I stumbled upon this piece. Despite its succinctness, it carries a sweepingly epic devotion, thereby elevating the carnal to the spiritual, the corporeal to the ethereal. Great work.

Thank you for this.

Best,
Ariana

( Posted by: Ariana [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )





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