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Tack Shed Romance


She was a rodeo girl
Till told it was cruel

Crunching peanut shells
Underboot
At the hardwood saloon

I was the steam of her showers
In deep inky hours
When life was but habit
And I was bad at it

World's-end girlfriend
As morning gulped-up noon
Belt-leather in a scent
Impressionistic in a squint

I read Walt's obsession
In leaves of grass
She said God bless him
But she would pass

So I brush down the mare
Break open a bale
Take the flick of an ear
For the tale



------
johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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The following comments are for "Tack Shed Romance"
by Flonigus

Thx Rogan
Appreciate the reading and comments. I'm happy with "funny and oddly poignant", and familiar with short-circuited.

Regards,

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

Done with Tact
Recklessly proverbial. Fair equine retort, the steam of showers. And you can't blame the mare for passing. The pun with Walt, that rhymes with gay showers. Checked that up- some indecision as to the validity. But a pun is a pun. And that second stanza was sublime. Best. You is a fungi. I prefer more Roy Chubby Brown. No tact.

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

added note
Further short-circuit... not Walt of Disney, but Walt Whitman of 'In Leaves of Grass'. My google word search yielded such. Stand corrected. Still done with tact, I believe.

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

Flonigus/"flick of an ear"...
John-
A highly enjoyable read.
For inducing smiles, thanks.

Tale on..

Ciao,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

Thx 1stEd, Pen, & Bobby
Good to hear from you all. Thank you for taking the time to consider and comment.

Penelope: Homesteading and yarn-sharing- I'd love to hear those tales. Redpath? There is a story in itself, I'm sure.

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

cowboy love.
Sorry I'm late getting in. This was fun. The songsmith in me wanted to find a lilt to sing the words. Raw and real and wonderful. Nicely done!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 25, 2008 )

Thx Penelope and jonpenny
Penelope: Only the first taste was free.

Jonpenny: It would be very good for someone to do just that- put some music to some of my stuff, and, under contract, make us some money. I've had the former, and am ready for the latter.

Thank you both for the visits and comments.

Take care.

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: November 26, 2008 )

I wuvved it
this one made me write haiku for YOU!

such lightness of image rhythm.,.,.,

regreTori

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 13, 2011 )





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