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a painful burning
Where is my soul?
A painful morning
Where is my soul?

A painful hearing
Where is my soul?
A painful smearing
Where is my soul?

A painful bearing
Where is my soul?
A painful rearing
Where is my soul?

A painful meaning
Where is my soul?
A painful meandering
Where is my soul?

A painful creeping
Where is my soul?
A painful leaping
Did you find my soul?

Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?

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The following comments are for "(Where is my heart?)"
by thesadpoet

attempt at 'where is my heart?'
Will have a stab. It's all that in it's burning, hearing, bearing, meaning, and creeping. By breadth and meaning, placement of 'Where is my soul?' supports the poem on the third line, each crisp and coincedental. Not seen before. Found soul between... words for souls, one interpratation? Found heart... by all pain from here on in, one further interpretation?


( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 24, 2008 )

my soul
Not one of my favorites from you. I think you did what you wanted to do. For me I was distracted and read it a few more times. I was struck with the feeling that you had a book in front of you looking for rhymes. You're better and deepeer than this evokes. I would challenge you to take the 'Where is my soul?' theme and and write it with a more open form. I am still and will remain a fan!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 25, 2008 )

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