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Out With the Bad


Clack clack clack of the wall clock
Mad cackle of a warlock
Kickin' me like Sicily
With night breath spikes
Into my chest like a
Lineman climbs a pole
Left with no rest
Sliding down a hole

*screech*

Spiral staircase
Rifle twist
One in the chamber
I won't miss
Now in the gaze
Of a hollow eye
Found is a way
To swallow pride

*click*

Last with only
Lock time left
Pass before me
Life bereft
Like this slug
Of a point
I'll be drug
From this joint

*boom*



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johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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The following comments are for "Out With the Bad"
by Flonigus

number one, with a bullet
so there’s you and I and johndoe. synchronicity? must be something in the air…

thoroughly enjoyed sinking my teeth in to this one, that read, first of all like an assassin’s soliloquy, but then- the last two line’s particularly- made me think of self-inflicted gunshot suicide… it goes with the breathless, halting style. the short staccato gasps of lines, the clear, blunt expressions…

something blackly comic in this too, in the wry resignation of what’s to come, and the meticulous detailing of the process involved…

a slick, effective piece of poetry. it’s more than a pleasure to read you again.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 15, 2008 )

Thx AMG & Chap1
Shannon,

Something in the air? Or not. Its been nine weeks without a smoke- cold turkey, for me. So where are the happy poems, I ask my muse?

(I would recommend whyquit.com as good reading for any considering such an undertaking.)

Thank you for the reading and comments.
________________________________________

Chap1,

Thanks for the six-shooter rating.

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: November 17, 2008 )

truth is erotic
this one just drips with the truth of life. Sublime - the kind I llllove - love-love it! Watch for a haiku I wrote specially for YOU!

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 13, 2011 )





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