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SEED

A secret seed planted
yields double blooms of beauty;
fed and watered by one woman and one man.
How divergent each bloom
in its beauty must be.

Tending to our precious flowers
we tend to bump into each other.
Tenderly bumping one another,
I will pollinate your flower
and see what beauty blooms.

We will tend blooms’ seeds together,
shielded from inclement weather.
Mother Nature knows us better
than we know our budding blooms.


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"A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds, adored by little statesman and philosophers and divines. With consistency a great soul has simply nothing to do."

- Ralph 'Where's Waldo' Emerson




"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like. And I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve."
- Bilbo Baggins














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The following comments are for "Seed"
by drsoos

Beyond Nature WE are the Seeds....
(Sorry, for the short comment, today and last night have been very uncomfortable for my physically. I am still not able to catch up on all those I have not yet read nor commented on)


This says something to me beyond the limits of the physical...beyond metaphor. I will say more later or maybe not.

Namaste,
Tashi Delek,
Peace, Love,
and John Lennon's
"IMAGINE"

YEAH, mix that all up
with some M-theory quantum
and the world can let go
of their old man on top of the
hill holding tablets and killing
himself on the cross...lovely,
nature, nutrue, love is natural,
hate is taught!

Sincerely,
Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 8, 2008 )

Rogan vs. Clarity
I could not have written this without the co------. I mean teamwork between Tina and myself, lacking clear guidance and both of us being Write-Off virgins. Somebody needs to clarify rules and guidlines r.e. Write-Offs. Tina and I were both in the dark regarding this. Seeking guidance, I cliked upon "Write-Off" listed among other obsolete info in the right-hand list. I found this "helpful" info:

Sunday Night Write-Off
Every Sunday night, I’ll be holding a writing competition called, “The Write-Off.” It will feature two Lit.Org authors, keyboard to keyboard in a test of their creative abilities. Each week the featured competitors will be provided with the same story starter and they will have to finish the story using about 1200 words. Both stories will then be posted at lit.org to be rated by all of our wonderful members.

Who has the bigger story writing cajones? That is up to you to decide. Read these stories during the week and rate them based on creativity, grammar and story writing prowess.

Friday night the winner will be announced along with the next week’s competitors. If you’re interested in flexing your literary muscles, email me at rick@lit.org or announce your interest in the forums section titled "The Write Off".

I'm proud to be a "Write-Off" competitor. I believe the confusion caused a communication between Tina and myself. We co-------ed, that is, worked together to make our own rules and do this thing together, each our own, but WE made the rules, as the posted rules were older than my cassette Walkman. Tina rules! Rogan, I don't blame you, but tell the next guy up two-thirds of your site info may have come from my cassette Walkman. Somebody needs to bring this wonderful site into the end of the first decade of the Twenty-first century.

With respect and love,
Steve aka drsoos

xo
s











( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 8, 2008 )

Pen- write-off
First off: I appreciate the Kudos to the bofus.

Secondly- repetition can be good. Have you read any lyrics lately (poems with a sound track.

Thirdly- This felt like an organic piece with myself as the recorder.

I respect your opinion of experience, I simply(?)
disagree.

I truly appreciate your reading, replying, and..
yes, your rating.

I'm so glad that you care enough to share.

s

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 9, 2008 )

Bloomin' with Soos
I, for one, liked the repetition and wordplay here. I noticed everything Pen did, but had a different reaction, thought, "How fun!" and looked for more, considered what you were communicating, came up with natural cycles. That fits in with the surface meaning as well.

Not the sort of poem I expected from you Steve, aside from the wordplay, but I enjoyed it just as well. gave Tina the edge, though, because I'm a sucker for a good rhythm.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 10, 2008 )

A Mighty Wind, Tina?
I see a multimedia wikiepedia exravaganza with Powerpoint and video; Bush- A Father, a Son, a Musical! Just cme to mind..

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 10, 2008 )

going to seed
love the spirit that informs and guides this, evoking and eliciting the tendencies of tenderness for and from your reader… this reader anyway, sighing. your poem, good doctor, is a lovely lotus, soothing and calming and much needed…

thanks for this nurturing vision, which I’m scoring a ten ‘cause- for me anyway- it was most sorely needed. síochán.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 11, 2008 )

Tina Rules! (Write-Off)
We inspired one another. Congatulations; first to Tina, yet also to each other, me too. You and I made it happen. Cooperation met creativity; you brought a bit more to the game..

xo
s

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 11, 2008 )

impressions of 'Seed'
However good this poem could have been, the gestating connectedness of loving partners is not lost on me. Although, I had hoped you would yield as to the seed- our futures most ever despite. Still, the promise of nature and of Tennyson are the more promising futures of our precious flowers. Dig it, could have been a nine.

t-asia [6]

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: November 12, 2008 )

A BLOOMING CLUSTERBOMB! (What did you think I would title this?
Pen: You've made some valid points. Whaddayawant in 24 hours (your actual time will vary: (for me; eating, sleeping, computer training, etc. allowed me to dwell upon it sans clue; I could likely improve this yet that may affect the organic effect of rushed confusion and agreement. Actually written in a few fits of lucidity. The theme could well be:
'Preparation is, or Should Be Foremost'.

firstedition: I appreciate your input. I'm no Tenny, son- so I don't expect to to rate me one. I'd like to see examples of your work (aside from commentary).

AMGuts: Thank you, but I'm no Nadia Comanichi; but if you don't stick it, one may hope something good sticks.
s

Viper: I counted upon you to disappoint me, expecting the sickness devoured by you and your ilk. Positive vibes render you asocial(LN).

Under concurring conditions I feel Tina and I both dealt with it together, each separately.
A Nine is fine- Im fuikuing with you.

Lena: I hope I surprised you. I regret you felt unwell. Thanks for your support.

Bob: Thanks for apparently sharing my vision, or my illusion at least.

TINA: Tons of fun and frustration. You must have assumed (you know what that does) that I was some experienced verbal contender who knew the ropes.
WRONG! With proper prep and let the queue disburse, I believe a rematch might interest you if and when practical.

I must admit that although I wasn't disappointed at my fractionally lower score, a higher level of contentment may well have been reached had our scores been reversed. Sincere congratulations mostly for your creation but also your winning score.

xo
steve


( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 12, 2008 )





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