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Coming through night
find bed torn apart
been to long.
But the color of your eyes
was worth a mess.
Gathered remains
tossed all of it
into washing machine
at least tonight
the room would be fresh.

Nor the color of rainbows
bleeding through
the mostly closed blinds
would dissuade me.

You sat there a glass in hand
wanting to be the way it was.

Realizing that was over
and where to go now.

Coyote Laughs so begins his favorite game

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The following comments are for "you could have considered"
by bhagwandave

this has many directions to me, like branches of a tree almost. There is one final direction at the end, which makes the other 'branches' suddenly take tree shape.

I like your ability to put somewhat disjointed thoughts together that are thought provoking.


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: November 5, 2008 )

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