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You who walk along the brown river
With your hair spreading like a flock of crows
You who walk along the brown river
And leave no reflection in the muddy waters
You who walk along the brown river
Covered in a dark mantle glittering with stars
You who walk along the brown river
And make the willows lean and kiss your steps
You who walk along the brown river
Who are you ? Where are you heading ?
And who am I ?

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by Paradox

along the brown river

actually very Zen, this, the refrain almost forming a mantra, the questions the search for illumination/ truth...

like the way this poem builds to a moment of realisation, but leaves the reader with a question, allowing them to take up the chant and make the mantra their own… hypnotic.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 1, 2008 )

Lovely poem, lovely rhythm throughout, but it falls apart at the end. Tries to hard to be zen-like, provocative, but there aren't any ideas there that we haven't seen a hundred times before, and the end doesn't really follow from what's come before.

I really liked the first nine lines, though.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: November 3, 2008 )

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