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I see a couple on the beach,
I try to understand the girl's
motives, as she sits and wears
her light tank top.

A rare California species with
a dark blue cap, underneath it, dark,
rich hair crashes down on her hot,
bare shoulders.

The girl smiles and applies
lotions onto her sun-burned
hands, legs, and arms, she is
oblivious to the tide's slithering
roar.

I then see the still bridge,
silent in the distance, watching
the girl as she leans
back on her thin white elbows,
pressing hard on the soft,
wet sand.

With a looming sense of oblivion,
now racing forward,
with its swift, weary, icy
hands.


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