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the chocolatier and the haddock

'i am the one
it is i
it is i
who aches so badly
for a haddock fish fry
i would give my right eye
for a dish so dear
i yearn to sit down with a fish, and a beer'

- and at this point he spat and he said with a sneer -

'but i am only a chocolatier
and i cannot afford this fine haddock

'i am the one
it is i
it is i
who stands on the dock
with a gleam in my eye
and i dream and i sigh
as the fish-boats appear
and they unload the day's catch
onto the pier'

- then he turned and he brushed away a small tear -

'but i am just a poor chocolatier
and i cannot afford this fine haddock


i am the one
it is i
it is i
who can bake the most scrumptious
chocolate pie
but for what reason? why?
my priority's clear
if only i had my own
fishing gear'

- and he thought of himself with a harpoon spear -

'ah, but i am merely a chocolatier
and i cannot afford this fine haddock'




------
J


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The following comments are for "the chocolatier and the haddock"
by mercer102

Jeff and the chocolatier
It's as if I want "who aches so badly" to rhyme with "symmetry" in a Blake poem we all know, and love to read out loud for the rhyme...

That said, I find this to be a fresh, rather than a trite, perspective on the age-old theme of wanting to elevate necessity while humbling superfluity.

Plus, its lilt and cadence are almost tidal, which is no easy feat in any poetry.

And the whimsy. Love the whimsy.

Thank you!

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: October 18, 2008 )

Just I!
I liked this, as well, for its whimsey. The most heady of subjects can all be boiled down in simple verse - I wamt and can not have. Life can really be a trial and how splendid to be able to have a haddock. But then why can't I have two?
Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 18, 2008 )





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