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Butterfly wings I've stretched into the dawn.
But you were still there, unhappy one.
Come, come join me in my lilac skies,
Cover my eyes with the golden sun.


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The following comments are for "Smile"
by Dew Of Blood

Where's Waldo
I was waiting for a clincher in the fourth line; didn't see it though. I don't know if it was forced irony on the title or I am overreading.

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: March 27, 2003 )

Wow. Those first two lines are so powerful. (God I wish I was better at expressing my opinions).

( Posted by: RainbowGyrl [Member] On: March 28, 2003 )

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