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No. 1

head in the clouds
blow hard, as
they drift away

No. 2

breakthrough moon
one quarter of
this world erased

No. 3

black butterfly
wings against the sky
autumn take a bow

No. 4

be silent
gather your soul
this mild wind parade

No. 5

weep not magic waters
we hollowed out the sea
white whale, I bring to thee

No. 6

southern fried glory
watermelon ready to explode
lip smacking cornbread

No. 7

hill upon hill
we conquer
all of them

No. 8

two panda bears
drunk from Saki
awaken bamboo forest

No. 9

the heart
of this stone
one grain of sand

No. 10

love or hate
seal your fate
claim your destiny

No. 11

Moon, be thy neighbor
Earth be thy maiden
Mars god of war















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The following comments are for "Haiku No. 1- 11"
by FireFly747

Haiku innumered
I must say, simply that I'm impressed and ..

I know that haiku is not truly defined by syllables, but by season and contrast/comparison.

I'll be back.

s

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 10, 2008 )

response to haiku's 1-4
One and Three flawless. Clearly, excellent observations. Perhaps Two and Four need attention. Otherwise, thank you for posting. Have enjoyed.

firstedition

( Posted by: firstedition [Member] On: October 14, 2008 )

Intriguing
Intriguing haikus, Firefly. I agree with firstedition that one and three are best, though the last line of four made me smile with admiration. :)

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: October 15, 2008 )





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