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The real war is home
Children getting killed
Stray bullets from guns to the heads
Who should be billed?
Ghetto walking on these threads

White chalked infants on the pavement
Coca Cola being used to clean their blood
Busy beating the innocent
Media concerned only of hurricane floods
Senate counting their scents

Bailing out Wall Street
Taxpayers owe seven hundred billion
Ghetto growing with welfare disease
Cost of foreign wars is in the trillion
Gangsters and drug dealers at ease

Drugging our soldiers
They feel no pain or emotion
If they did they would kill themselves
From pointing a gun with commotion
Aiming at innocent civilians lined along the shelves

Crude oil is our modern gold
Fuel my hummer to get up this mountain
I have to kill these Afghanistan’s
Thoughts and government to maintain
I know roger and I kill Stan

The ten o’clock news says we are winning
Confused and wondering who we are fighting
Protect these engineers on the job
Shading the armies lighting
I sit and eat my corn on the cob

When will this pipeline be completed?
The foreign oil to an end
Blood spilled for my gas tank
What message do we send?
We all live as planks on an ocean of breeze.

Unaffected by a war four thousand miles away
Budget cut’s effect my street violence
Less police and more gangs
When will we take a stance?
Humans learn to have more pains

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The following comments are for "Stan"
by NucleusFire

learning pain
a zeitgeist ridden piece, this, redolent of paranoia and despair… some clever tongue twists to this angsty lament, makes me think it’s a performance piece. always enjoy the intensity of your work. dystopian, this one… I like that too.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 7, 2008 )

Thanks Shannon,

I sort of take what is current in news and peoples thoughts and created this piece. I wanted to capture what the Media portrays on a daily basis and spin it to seem like it’s a persons unconscious realizations.


( Posted by: nucleusfire [Member] On: October 7, 2008 )

How very sad indeed. This piece strikes on so many emotions. It's incredible how well put this is in displaying to what extremes we go to; what ugliness we are capable of and for what? Our behaviors make no sense. We are cruel, violent, shelf animals fighting of a goal that's in itself is not all that clear to begin with.

Well, at least that's my take.

Very deep

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: October 9, 2008 )

I missed this one...Caitlin
I am sorry this one must of passed me by during my absence time, been real plate overloaded lately with medical and new venture, etc., so I read it tonight, and thought, first thought, was "getting to used to pain and things getting worse?" I wondered if that's what you meant, like a giving in to and adaptation to what is truly unacceptable for any of us as humans

....So many wrongs and suffering in this world, and all I can think is what I was taught by the Chasids, unlike the more passive Buddhists, and Tibetan practice that I do today...this takes me to the their thoughts, the Chasid thoughts, from Torah, and that I cannot stand idly by while my brothers are dying all around me, or sisters or humanity. I want to do something. For the sin of omission, (not getting involved, doing nothing or leaving something out that could have been said or done) to me is the worst of sins.

This poem as in your usual style is tightly woven and perfectly executed like a flowing river, it runs through me, I can feel it. That is has a life and strong voice.

Blessings, and namaste!

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 11, 2008 )


I always enjoy your comments and feedback. Makes me think and appreciate your intelectual responses. Thank you for your time and helping me better myself and writing and on a small scale the human race.


( Posted by: nucleusfire [Member] On: October 11, 2008 )

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