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Empty frames ... on the wall
For you I had ... to hang them all
But now I feel ... I 'm going to fall
you I fear ... have grown too tall
to dance again with me
Things you start to see
when you're alone

Things you start to see
When you're alone

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I know I can't ... suffice your list
of things to do ... I do my best
and though I try ... I still resist
change you pose ... if you exist
in just one frame with me
Things you never see
when you're in love


Things you never see
when you're in love


It's clear I can't ... win this game
of hide and seek ... I call your name
you've changed the rules ... it's not the same
to feel the passion without that flame
of love now dead inside
It seems I have to find
a place to hide

I guess I have to find


a place to hide

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Words don't mean ... the same to me
Things that'd been ... no longer here
Long ago ... "we" stopped to be
yet cursed to last ... and watch defeat
That "we" just can no longer be
Things you start to see
when your alone

Things you start to see
when your alone


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Things you used ... to always say
Hugs and kisses ... night and day
Green trees ... you promised me
The leaves now fall ... and I can see
your eyes ask what I am doing here
The bitter fruits of love
are coming near

Floating faces
of those once were here

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Things you start to see
when you're alone

Things you never see
When you're in love

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Things you start to see
when you're alone

Things you never see
When you're in love


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2008, Wael Nawara





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The following comments are for "Things you Start to See"
by waelnawara

Eyes Wide Open Often Slow...
This poem completely encapsulates the old saying that "love is blind" in some cases good thing, in some not. Good expression of thoughts and insights here. Good write. Blessings to you and yours,

Salaams!

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 2, 2008 )

Love is indeed ...
Blind ... yes, Lena ... thanks for pointing that out ... there are things you never really see when you're in love ... things you onloy start to see when you're alone ... out of love ... distant from that "fatal attraction" ...

Thanks Lena for your nice words ...

Bless you and yours dear :)

( Posted by: waelnawara [Member] On: October 4, 2008 )

when your alone
The well traveled alley of 'love as pain' always amazes me. For all the billion words to that sad eventuality we get no closer to solving it's mystery. We still can find another way to say what it/love does to us.
This has a pop quality but could easily be blues.Love to hear the finished song. Great verse and chorus definition and I don't mind the change in the refrain since it flows from the hook. Well written.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 15, 2008 )

falling out of love
Thanks Jon. Yes, you meet someone and you fall in love with them and you think that love will never fade away.

Then, one day the charm breaks. Suddenly you start to see things that were probably there all along ... but you just never saw them

Worse, you suddenly see yourself caged in frame ... framed in other words, in someone who looks like you but is not quite you.

Thanks for your nice words. I will probably sing this with a piano background ... the tunes I have for it are more pop than blues ...

( Posted by: waelnawara [Member] On: October 21, 2008 )





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