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broken hearts and porno faces
desparate smiles, despairing chants
an altar to a dead god
priests left mourning
your power has corroded
your love gone to shit
their eyes grow weaker
the mind of a child
left alone to survive
through the storm


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by JonnyT

reads like a snap-shot of the modern moment, empty aggressive sex, empty aggressive religion, wilfully ignorant 'cause it's better than looking the truth in the face...

second stark piece, I've read this morning, but this in a different way. first was expansive, this was short, sharp smack in the face...

enjoyed but wish it was longer, worked in to a lyric, maybe?

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 28, 2008 )

thanks :-)
yours was the first account I checked when I started visiting here again - nice to hear from you.

this actually started as song lyrics before I decided to change it - may rewrite later tho.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: September 29, 2008 )

I agree with Shannon. This has promise, but may work better as lyrics. Hope you repost, as you've suggested!

And -- good to see your work again, JonnyT. :)

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 1, 2008 )

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