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Iím not your dream.

I may be your nightmare-
more likely, your illusion,
perhaps an old youthful mistake.


Shattered shards reflecting memories:
my mindís mirror, murky.
Mercury silvering senesces.


milky way memories obscure shades of grey.
Dark matter eclipses my darkest fears.
Here there be dragons.

Can I face the faces? Who are we?
Glimpses of a man- reflections of my least.
One my best- the other my beast.


How can I share myself
when I scare myself?
Who am I?

I'm not your dream.

------


"A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds, adored by little statesman and philosophers and divines. With consistency a great soul has simply nothing to do."

- Ralph 'Where's Waldo' Emerson




"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like. And I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve."
- Bilbo Baggins













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The following comments are for "Soul mate"
by drsoos

my best/ my beast

second stanza resonates most of all for me, 'cause you know I'm a sucker for alliterations and "murky./ mercury" and "silvering senesces", just glide over the tongue, woozily smooth...

as for best and beast, we are compelled to share ourselves precisely because we scare ourselves... that's the conclusion I've come to anyway... but then, I'm odd... ;)




( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 2, 2008 )

[POEWHIT]
Just like the mask of the LONE RANGE - I'm with you

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: September 3, 2008 )

AMG Alliterate
Thanks. In my(?) first version I used "shattered" twice. I ended up changing most of that stanza and I'm pleased with it. I'm glad you are too.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: September 3, 2008 )

of "best" and "beast"..
..a highly enjoyable read.

"Here there be dragons"..indeed.


Out of a dream, but not quite awake,
BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: September 6, 2008 )





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