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Smokey spires and deep fathoms,
Long lost feelings in this madness.
Feeling and reeling as the heat burns
Turning inside as I take my turns.
So move away, away, further away,
Your closeness makes me feel so strange.
Whats your game, whats the plan?
I turn away to avoid meeting your eye.
I feel so shamed, so blamed, responsible.
For this, for that, for all that transpires.
As the flames grow and engulf the spires.
My mind tears itself away, folding.
The implication seems staggering
as the facts fall around me.
The odds, stacking to form a cage.
A wall of silence to keep me in.
Striving to change the way
always falling victem to myself.
The fury, the flame, the passion.
I live for the feeling, the emotion.
I turn to to look into the eye,
Yet I find myself looking back.
A grin, a smile, a small laugh.
It was here all along.
I was here all along.
It was me.


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The following comments are for "Spire"
by Chrispian

Flowing
An interesting piece, though I'm a little unsure about the seemingly incidental rhyme scheme. Reading it once doesn't give me a great view, but I couldn't see why the lines in question which rhymed were meant to hold more importance than others. The poem flowed well, except for one line in particular, i felt. "I feel so shamed, so blamed, responsible." It feels like there should be an extra syllable in there, and it stops the flow that there isnt, imho. Overall, though, a good poem, rich with imagery and meanings galore.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 20, 2003 )

poetry
That was imaginitive.And I like the line"I feel so shamed,so blamed,responsible".

( Posted by: suez-q [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

@Spire
Wow...
This poem is Amazing...
I have to say I will never forget it.
So rich and so meaningful.
Even though you posted it since 9 years, i now joined LIT.org since 4 months and I am trying to check everything out.
You are amazing, your style of writing in unique.
Thank you.

( Posted by: Sami93 [Member] On: December 11, 2010 )





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