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Please forgive me for not being strong
It's hard, I've been here for so long
Please forgive me, I didn't want to break
It's not like I'm here for my own sake
Please forgive me for being such a pain
Without you I'd simply go insane
Please forgive me for always calling you
I just miss your voice and laughter too
Please forgive me for always dropping by
I just don't want to be alone, any wonder why
Please forgive me for getting jealous sometimes
I don't want to loose you is that a crime
Please forgive me for often just starting to cry
I'm sure one day my eyes will run dry
Please forgive me for writing this
It's just my way of saying it's you I miss
It's you who's always been there for me
It's you who eventually made me see
There is a point to trying that little bit more
It's you who helped me see what I'm aiming for
So please forgive me for not being strong
I thought there was no way I could be
I was wrong







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The following comments are for "Please Forgive Me"
by ~H~

nearly didn't
I saw the layout and nearly didn't read it. Too much!!. However, layout sometimes disguises passion. And there's enough of it. I like it- the passion that is. I feel though it may have 'lost the plot' towards the end.

( Posted by: heart afire [Member] On: March 15, 2003 )

Thank you
Thank you for putting into words an emotion that i so often feel. It always seems that just when i feel i'm reached my limit, i found stregth i didn't know i had. But sometimes it's hard to realize that and you take it out oon the people around you. Very, very nice work.

( Posted by: E.G. Evans [Member] On: March 17, 2003 )

nice.
There is a ring of truth to this poem. It just feels real. Definitely worth the time to stop and read it :)
I think I would have added a stanza break, at the point where you change tack slightly ("It's you who's always..."); I think that would make it an easier read. But don't change anything else - it's a lovely poem.
Score 8/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: March 17, 2003 )





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