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Once upon a time they would gather round; their heavy gowns draped from head to toe, faceless shadowed hoods echoing melodic chants while drawing its store of life.

Now a breeze blows leaves through the forgotten square and howls eerily as it passes over the dark rounded opening. Bats flutter into the gaping blackness, escaping the silver glow of rising sun. Rustling leaves swirl and lift, and scuttle over the hard cold earth, chattering across worn, cracked paving slabs to gather in still corners.

Rooks, congregating high in twiggy treetops craw and screech loud their morning chorus, flap and wing from copse to spinney in crisp morning air. Rats scurry back and forth the grey stone corners busy in their search, while light cuts sharp the shadow of crumbled wall across the square.

A vector of emptiness circles, and cooing pidgins, invisible, perch the ruins. The ancient shaft sinks and darkens with its depth, silent to the verve above, its water black and still. Leggy spiders crawl the circumference of moistened brick in slow and steady stride forgotten through change and time.

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The following comments are for "The Well"
by HdotOdotWARD

Clear view
Very discriptive. You've given an open-eyed visual but I'm curious about who these hooded, faceless characters are.


( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: August 24, 2008 )

Hoods that echo
Tammy - thanks for the comment, the hoods were a way to include the presence of people without a definition or description of who once gathered round a well and monks would seem to fit the description to define a time of use and person also long defunct and forgotten. I used the title as an exercise from which to develope text and maybe one day build upon as both wells and monks can be sinister. The text, I hoped, could be read with both a dark tendentious slant or purely descriptive of a disused and forgotten well and I'm pleased the hoods captured a little curious thought.

( Posted by: HdotOdotWARD [Member] On: August 26, 2008 )

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