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Two days clear
He tried to hang
Hisself

Cried for help,
I cut him loose
His neck was thick
And red with straining

I shouted then
More at myself
‘Til I coloured, smote
With the same suit

And both of us being
Short of breath
Went our separate ways.

In the feeble lull of
Indifferent hours
I nurse the
Exacerbated knot
That he
In cautious failure
Assumed would tide him
Over

And I remember
My mother
A lonely numeral
In a dim, damp hospital
Her bottom lip chewed
While I lay a docile
And unsuccessful applicant.

Aggie, I’m sorry
For the feeling you’d failed me
Cowed and ashamed by
Your own anger

Ma, I’m sorry
But like Ryan’s knot
All my near misses
Are too late to undo.



------
The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "Ryan’s knot"
by AuldMiseryGuts

Indifferent hours
This is an uncompromising picture you paint. Made me think of Ian Curtis.

Seems in saving friend, poet metaphorically took his place. You've written of knots before but I find you have also used them as guides to safer havens.

I also like when you write of your mother because your love of life shines through the darkness you seemingly cannot escape. Hope I'm wrong about the darkness bit.

Not much for commenting at moment but I noticed this lonely post and wanted to shed a light on it because no Shannon O'Dubhuir poem should ever be ignored.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: August 7, 2008 )





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