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Sitting at the table
Having coffee served by Mabel
Brings relief because you’re able
With your legs under the table
To remove your horrid shoes from off your feet

The coffee with its cream
And aroma in its steam
Help relax you as you dream
For ten minutes, so supreme
Away from all the bustle of the street

Above the cups that clatter
There’s the early morning chatter
Of important things that matter
While the children pitter patter
Round all the lovely people that you meet

And when the cup is empty
Of the coffee that was plenty
You begin to make your entry
With your payment complimentary
Into the days familiar jungle beat



Howard 30 May 02




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The following comments are for "Coffee Break"
by HdotOdotWARD

hey!
the rhythm reminds of Poe's Raven, positively resonates with it in fact, and that gothic structure coupled with an every-day, decidedly un-gothic subject is a highly effective juxtaposition indeed… whether this was intended or not…

really enjoyed this, not the first of yours I’ve read, but the first that’s really grabbed me (coffee is a subject dear to my heart), not that your other pieces were bad, just that I clicked with this one. will be sure to check back through your others too, now, you’ve piqued my interest…

nice, tight, well-rhymed and well-rhymed versification this. not as easy as you make it look, I know, but you do make it look very easy indeed… and, in case nobody else has yet done so: welcome to Lit.org, don’t be shy, get stuck in with some commenting…

look forward to reading more by you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 5, 2008 )

this made me happy
I love this poem, everything was perfect the ryhming and the topic.

( Posted by: smartie99 [Member] On: August 13, 2008 )

Lit.Org welcome
I'm getting to like it here - some interesting reads - and thanks for the welcome - yall

( Posted by: HdotOdotWARD [Member] On: September 1, 2008 )





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