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It's a slow suspend of our
veering selves.
It's a slower scape from our
colliding wake.
This sequence of never worn
happening is happening
now, and full of
time to delve
under and over
and out.



These scenes of leaning
cities, leaning on our
will's of wit and
ready.
Unfolding and molding
a land to bare
a naked and sacred sense
of same, tangled with
a sense of
more to
wear.



We can decide to suspend
our veer and stay
here and
stray.



We can, but we'll miss our
bus.



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The following comments are for "Bus"
by matt73

"slow suspend "
fantastic opening lines, those. I can picture the lost and the wanting to get lost, those who need nothing more than to make some space for themselves, but are hemmed in on all sides by the detritus and deadlines of modernity...

been a long time since I've read you, good to see you posting again.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 3, 2008 )

Street scenery
I like the scattered abstractness, and the combination of alliteration mixed with well chosen rhyme adds a nice street-like flow. It reminds how I often start to notice things that are similar, then I shift my mind to concentrate on only those certain things that are similar and 15 minutes later I realize that much different things come to my view. Its kind of like 7 degrees of separation, if we connect similarities we can eventually show how an apple is somehow connected to, say, a bus….

The last lines add a great touch of humor too.

Nice work. Like it a lot.
BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 11, 2008 )





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