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and here i am sitting on my own feeling tired and bruised
its been a long day, ive been fighting since dawn
its been a long week, i am dry and i am worn.
but im soft and im gentle becuase im so bruised.

easily my world has ripped apart
with delicate blows that have struck me in the head
and my blood drips the drops of warm molten lead
its just a moments before snakes strike at my heart

if i could reach just a drop of cold water
i would put it on my tongue
im in pain from my kidney to my lung
i am tired a drained from the day long slaughter.

so tell me if you can where you will put me
tell me where i can lay down for now
tell me if you will save me for now
just keep me here and let me see

its been such a bad day today im so very tired
its been such a bad day, i am oh so very tired.

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