Reassuring to find one of the 'old guard' still here, and generous of you to read and comment. I toyed with balancing the syllables '... and cries discretely', but decided against it. Your 5-7-5 is better than mine, if balanced they must be.
Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: July 18, 2008
An intriguing piece. I admire any writer by the way, who attempts such structured poetry. It's not at all easy, yet this is written so well.....Bravo!
Thanks Colin, Williamhill
... for reading, getting it, commenting to that effect. Appreciated.
Posted by: mobiussoul [Member] On: July 25, 2008
that there was a time he did none of these things, when he didn't wear dark glasses, attending readings or cry discreetly... he does now though, so, so much for early promise... I like that, how title dovetails with body, promise verses disappointment. not necessarily ‘cause promise was not fulfilled, but possibly ‘cause it was… I am doing my usual and over-reading again…
glad you came back, and sorry I missed you…
oh aye, and I don’t believe poets should do anything discreetly.