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In a state of mind, so somber, so bliss,
helplessly falling into the endless abyss.
Hearing the sound of nothing at all,
cursed with vision impossible to recall.



In a state, so lone, so far
guided only by a misled star,
Maddened by the ignorant masses,
trapped within thoughtless trances.



In my state, imprisoned still,
willingly stuck by an unpaid bill.
Hopeless future upon which i dwell,
dreaming dreams of a different hell.

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The most fantasical truth of all: There is no meaning to any of this.


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by Gothicdustin

Souls of the Abyss
I too have a piece called "The Abyss Until Now" Haven't posted it anywhere yet. Mine deals with the same. Yours is the acknowledgment of and mine is my definition of the existence and void of the abyss. See great minds think alike...Just kidding!

Love how your..."...In my state, imprisoned still willingly stuck by an unpaid bill." can be taken both literally and metaphorically. This I enjoyed. Nice

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: July 8, 2008 )

thanks
TAMMYHENDRIX, I would like to read your piece once you do post it. Thank you for the nice comments.

desvelado, For a long time that was my life, I could not better describe my life the past few months then with this poem. Fortunately, It has come to a close.
I am a fan of, and have only written darker poems. In time, I may write "happy poems".

( Posted by: Gothicdustin [Member] On: July 11, 2008 )





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