Lynched blues (adult content)
by desvelado (Member) - published: July 1, 2008
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Category - Poetry
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Disclaimer:

N word not used lightly or to offend. Wrote this without realizing where it was going. No apologies.

Author's Note:

Been reading Langston Hughes' biography...again. The man is/was inspiring. There's another Langston inspired poem in my posts. Link is posted after this poem.

Lynched Blues
(Inspired by Langston Hughes' poetry)
F.R. Toscano

Words are solid
southern crosses
ma,
taken to task
by men worn
to dust.

(No more lynchings, God,
I've had enough.)

Words renew and injure.
Bruised trees take
deeper root.
Always a deeper well
to drown in
while ma sings the blues.

(No more lynchings, God,
I've had enough.)

Words are stupor'd -
not grace.
When some say "nigger,"
I see God's face.
Trust your heart, ma;
devil has left this place.

(No more lynchings, God;
I think You're next.)

(30 June 2008)

http://www.lit.org/view.php?viewid=3967

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"The most well founded opinions, the most harmonious philosophic systems have always seemed precarious: Contradictory remarks made by others seem to me just as valid." - Francis Ponge (translated by Beth Archer)

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The following comments are for "Lynched blues (adult content)"
by desvelado

corrected link
Left off 2 in link.
http://www.lit.org/view.php?viewid=39672

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: July 2, 2008 )

loving nature
very compassionate heart felt and brave.

Wouldn't expect anything less from you....as I said your a good man!

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: July 2, 2008 )

I thought I told you! ..._igger Please!
...not to change a word! see now that's the problem with writers "they" a'ways want to fix on something! LOL!!!! ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

No but really, this flows and the other flows of course but this was all you, (go deeper) I feel you can. "D" you are a great writer I value your work and comments as well. with every poem there is a flow. fast to slow, choppy to elongated it just happens so how ever it comes...let it!

I've got my eye on you! I'll re-read and submit a piece to correspond with yours all in lit boo!
last tag first tag you're ...IT!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: July 3, 2008 )

No more lynchings, God
Thanks Tammy and La'Shea. Think I'll take you up on your suggestion to expand this, La'Shea. I won't change a word to what's been posted.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: July 5, 2008 )

I said it before
but I'll say it again, 'cause it stands repeating: this is a fine poem, it's direct, compassionate, and above all else, it's dignified… I know from writing so many of my own “inspired by” pieces, back in the day, how clumsy they can come off if not handled with maturity and sensitivity… you take this, keep the essence and make it your own, from the scene setting of the opening stanza, to the last, challenging “you’re next”…

if I’d change a thing, I’d unbracket that and let it fly free, like a fist to the face… but that’s just me, and I’m unwieldy like that… and yours sounds like a determined whisper, which is probably much more effective… I’ve missed you, my friend, hope all’s well.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: July 10, 2008 )

A poet.
I didn't know you wrote poetry.

( Posted by: skunk3632004 [Member] On: July 11, 2008 )

Pointed
Well my friend this one rocks me. I'll add to what Shanon wrote. The economy of words and the emotion generated in word choice is masterful. The simplicity is what gives the piece soul otherwise it could become preachy and distractee. By being brave enough to let the reader fell what the reader will feel is what makes it a good piece.
Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 12, 2008 )

When some say "n!gger"
Yes, skunk, unfortunately for some, I do write poetry. Been writing for most of my forty years. I used to walk on railroad tracks making up songs when I was a boy. Still do it on occasion.

Glad you enjoyed it jonpenny. Originally wrote it without the "ma" bit and posted it on livejournal. Changed it up a bit when I posted it here. The word in question, however, never changed because I really didn't see it as a problem.

Thank you both for taking the time to read and comment.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: July 13, 2008 )

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