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The cracked cocoon of
The sun
Leaks light

I am a stranger here
The self-
conscious creep of
The tide for company

And you on the beach
With your book
In your own world.

We walked from the station,
Hobbling,
You stopping to shake small
Stones from your open-
toed summer shoes

Me, impatient on blue,
We passed
Gap-toothed buildings
Offensively white
Stared stark in
The raw welt of the heat

The failed façade of
The Brighton Grand
Where you joke about booking
A room there

And I joke about
Being barred
After last time.

On the beach now
Just up past the pier,
That cripple’s hand
Emptily
Grasping the sea

Trying to claw back the covers
Trying to swaddle itself

But the blue is too heavy
To quick

And it comes up the beach,
Cooling your heels
In the over-
eager afternoon

Be a love, you say,
Go get us a Cornetto

And smiling, shielding
My eyes from the sun
I go back to the little ice-
cream place you favour.

The kiosk is last,
A frontier post

Past its brown-
flied shutters and
Play-billed walls
The restoration stops

The beach-front is bland then
To Saltdean and Rottingdean

Poor people, overdressed
Don’t seem to know its summer
Drink cider in big baggy sports coats
Beneath the pillars of an absent-

What? Bandstand?

-It is hard to say
The ivy has covered the
Most of it
Reclaiming it all
For a grave

When I get back to you
Your Cornetto has melted

You kiss me on the forearm
And say
Never mind.

Together, our toes touching
The frill of the water
We watch the horizon dilate

Already massive is stretches to
Accommodate more late-
coming birds

You take gin and juice
From you cool bag
I swim a little and see
There are weird thin fish in
The water

My grandfather would know what they were called
But he’s dead
So we cannot ask him

They are silvery thin
Like your earrings
The ones that your nana
Bought you for Christmas

You don’t believe me
So I show you

And you being you
You try to catch one

They’re too fast but
It is a good game.

Drunk, on yellowish beach towels,
Hearing the fair from
A mile down the stretch

I put my head on your shoulder now
And you smell of sun-cream and it
Is good

You find a penny
Deep down in the stones
Which in turn turns out
To be an arcade token

Oh, you say, well
They’re lucky too
And you put it in to
Your pocket…


------
The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "Brighton"
by AuldMiseryGuts

Peering In




http://www.brightonpier.co.uk/indexinfohtml.htm

Barred from The Grand.... hope it was nowt to do with the 12th Oct 84....

Blackpool would have been the place to go A Mini Vegas.... UK style...

Mind you are probably closer to Holywood

Eric

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: June 14, 2008 )

Why I am a fan
In a world where we spew words at each other with no more meaning than what is known about the designer clothes we wear, it is delightful to read and get someone from their words. You made and outing an adventure and an observer to see more color and nuinance reading of it than being there. You find a penny and it turns out being a token. It's the way you write.
Thanks again!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 15, 2008 )

Token to Shannon
Shannon-
Enjoyed read, though not keen on all those caps.

Induced a few smiles.

A 'dilating horizon'...Cool

Is 'is' a typo, after "massive"?..read as: "it"

Happy Summer!


Bibbing in Babylon,
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 22, 2008 )

Shannon in Brighton
You arrest time in this, and you do it in a way that frees the reader: I love the freedom this creates! Your narrative pays attention to simplicity in details, but lets no beauty escape, lets no heartspace close.
You go to and reach the core of everything from melted ice cream to stones to kiss on forearm. You're good at that, finding the inside. I love reading finding the inside.

"The cracked coccoon of the sun leaks light", is just one more, among thousands, of your lines that showcase poetry in its purest form.

Thank you for this!

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 25, 2008 )

Brighton/ Brightoff
'lo there all, sorry it's taken so long to get back to you, I shall endeavour to do so now:

Eric, thanks for stopping by, in answer to first question, short answer is “no”, although original poem on LJ referenced now infamous Tory Party conference… I do try, where possible, to leave politics out of poetry… not always successfully, I know, but I try… *shrugs*…

went to Blackpool once, with friends from Uni… all a bit of a blur, to be honest… think Brighton’s much more laid back… not a patch on childhood holidays back home, but living now in London Brighton’s closest I get to “proper” seaside, although even that is more like London-Upon-Sea, very self consciously cool… didn’t let that spoil our fun though… gin and juice, anyone…?

jp, thank you very kindly. really enjoyed writing this, think because it was a good day and there aren’t many of those on offer lately… glad that others got sense of place too…

Bobby, point taken as to caps, but they’ve been with me since I started writing and they’ll probably always remain… habit was started by English teacher, I keep them as some keep hold of old theatre tickets or postcards, they have sentimental value… apologies for typos, which I know are numerous, I get carried away sometimes and fingers can’t keep up with brain… or is that the other way around?

anyway, thank you for smiling…

Lucie, thank you so much for finding free and freedom here. best to ye, my friend…

thanks again all. cheers.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: July 10, 2008 )





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