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she sleeps at 5 for 5 and she's all yours.
she perfects faults and she's guilty for you.
she's cast in bronze and she's waiting on you.
she's tipping thoughts and she really wants you.
she dries grey skies and she does it for you.
she tugs footfalls because she heard you.
she ballets alone because she found you.
this one's for you. just you.

can you believe me now?

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The following comments are for "Love on Locks."
by ^white

hey, ^white!
really like this. think her actions are well-chosen to provide striking images, but also to make as much- if not more- good poetic/ metaphorical sense as they do literal... if you get what I mean?

reading this, I also remembered that I had encountered your work before and I was impressed with it then too... also noticed you haven't commented since way back in May 2007.... what're you waiting for?

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: June 4, 2008 )

haha! yea! you have certainly read quite a few of my poems. thanks for the compliments! i guess i was hoping my poems will do the talking for me. they certainly took a change compared to the early years.

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: June 10, 2008 )

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