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Silly Hailey wants to love somebody
Like she loves ice cold fruity smoothies
They make her squirmy and squeaky
Like mice on cheese trap trickeries
She’ll skip the peanut butter jam glees
To hug you airtight in the mornings
So don’t you wake in hasty minutes
And leave her lonely on nobody
Eating Nutella out the jar funny.


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The following comments are for "Morning Hot Choc."
by ^white

"To hug you airtight in the mornings"
worth it for that line alone, the image of the airtight hug...

not so sure about the rest, too many ees for my liking, makes it seem weak somehow... but then that might be just right for silly Hailey...

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: June 3, 2008 )

definite
they're definitely mushy, definitely perfect for silly hailey. :)

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: June 10, 2008 )





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