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I could see from an open window
in a field a dead child waltzing with fire,
her eyes followed a swallow
into deaths gates of sapphire.


I heard from an open window
a childs half-haunted screams
shatter the panes to
slice open my feverish dreams.

In a wounded reverie
a child visits me
we waltz towards
the threshold of eternity.

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whoever you are come forth these are the days that must happen to you.


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by icemoon

not so much
a poem as a vision, the kind of prophetic dream mystics and scryers used to have… that’s what this put me in mind of…

arresting visuals with many layers of possible interpretation and meaning… something almost Biblical about this. interesting read.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: May 31, 2008 )

interesting read...
Very interesting read...

I could visualize this read that happens every now and then but this one here has so sort of truth ringing in it to me. could be taaken literal or as the dult to the cild inside of us and even as a warning...this piece is haunting and seems sacred and possibly telling.

interesting read indeed.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: June 1, 2008 )

thanks
thanks everyone for your comments-i wrote this after reading charlotte mews-i wish it was on a par with her work,penelope can you suggest a different dance for the last verse?-barry

( Posted by: icemoon [Member] On: June 1, 2008 )





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